Swimming in the ocean
Splashing in the waves
Tasting the salty water
Current pulling you farther
Clear blue water
Almost like glass
Sand from the floor
In between your toes
Diving beneath the water
Searching for treasure underwater
Every moment is a new adventure
The beautiful ocean
Sweeping you away
Only for a little while
Until stepping out
Onto the beach
Leaving behind the experience
Of swimming in the ocean
Alex: you really make me want to travel to the ocean when I read this piece. It is creative and fun to read. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteWow Alex I love how descriptive you are, very affective:) The only suggestion I can think of is maybe adding more of a human emotion to it, tell us how the person feels emotionally about the water. Awesome job!
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